Great job and congratulations =) Sounds pretty good!

when that flute sound comes in at about :13, I already lose interest.  Catching the listener's interest early on is really important.  You might have nice ideas later on, but it doesnt matter since the listener will lose interest so fast.  I was patient enough to keep listening only because of the fact that we are in this forum and this is a WIP and we are all helping eachother. 

You did a good job with the melodies, sound selection, and the arrangement is ok.  Nothing really wrong there.  There is just stuff missing like things to fill the empty spaces that provide atmosphere and depth (for example more reverb and fx for certain things, that others have already stated).  Tension building is also missing.

Anyways like i said, you have no problem coming up with ideas but I just lose interest really fast because there is nothing to hook me. good job and keep working! 

This was one of the very first tracks I ever completed almost 7 years ago, and my friend keeps pushing me to do a re-work but who knows what I'll do. 

I just want to share this with you guys because I feel that it still offers something, even though the mix makes this upload almost embarrassing for me   I hope you guys at least enjoy it for the cool idea that it is 

Hey thanks for the feedback Lydian!  I would love some above and beyond type of male vocals, maybe I should just PM them and ask them for some wouldn't hurt to try.

not a whole lot of highs I know.  Easy on the ears is right and yes that does make sense, i try to avoid overcrowding the 2k and up area specifically for that reason. Thanks for giving me your fresh ear perspective on that 

I agree about the something missing to make it special.  I will be working on it all this week during spring break and maybe I'll have a breakthrough! 

thanks again!

Dude, you're telling me? I've been working on my latest track for about 3 months now..I have a big problem with completing tracks, mainly because I am always learning so my idea of "finished" feels never ending >.<

Im looking forward to the updated version. theres so many melodies that pop into my head when I listen to this that would take this track to a new level, haha. 

Once it hits about 1:15 or so, im expecting something else to keep me interested but it didnt happen because the intro is very good and everything that comes after that just doesnt live up to the promising vibe it gives off.

also, at :58 that pitch rise pad that comes in at the beginning of the break is superb.  Great effect on my brain and setting the atmosphere.  But the interest slowly fades away after that (slowly as in it still keeps me interested but not that much)

good work!

edit: let me add that the mix is pretty damn good which is CRUCIAL to setting this kind of atmosphere.  I forgot to mention that.

all the other sounds would greatly benefit from the bass being cut around the areas of 2k and 4k.  But do it without taking away too much presence, because I know what you're going for.  good job, but the counter melodies need work. nice vocals, where are they from?

Kick is slightly too loud and overpowering, careful with that.  The beginning intro pluck melody does not want me to keep listening, it could be improved upon.  I understand that it is just a little intro melody but it needs to be able to pull me in a little more.  You have a nice ear for melodies and chords.

at 2:00 when the breakdown begins, you give away too much too early and you can do a better job of building the tension there, which is really important. You have some good harmonies going on and I think you can introduce the soudns in that breakdown better.

at 4:50 that new melody that comes in is alright but I feel like you need to make some space in the frequency spectrum because at this point its just compromising the sound of your other instruments

but still, good job and keep working!