Nice minimal deep techno vibes! pretty legit man.  I want it to sound a little darker because its not quite as mysterious and dark as I want this to be. But this is purely my personal taste. Im just typing in a stream of consciousness manner.  All the sounds have their own space and thats what makes this track really solid.  Nice kick and bass relationship, that is suuuuper crucial and you nailed it!

As far as something constructive I can add; I think the bass is what makes this track slightly too happy for my taste, the pitch of it and the fact that the melody rises up at the end of it.

the sound that comes in at 2:40 and is used continuously throughout the track is nice, its like a low-pass filtered distorted mid percussion thing and you use it effectively. but, I think you need to bring that out more because thats one of your "hottest" sounds in the track, try giving it a little more reverb and pan it moderately to the left and/or right with some variation. Maybe layer it with something subtle to bring it out more.

im not even that much into this genre and I like it so congrats!

I listened to the original, that is a great track.

Your track is a pretty good interpretation of the original! The mixing is average, some of the sounds are too loud and at times there are too many things in my face at once and it hurts my ears. maybe use some panning on some of them and EQ out any harsh frequencies.  The vocal gets drowned out by all this as well, gotta make room for that in the frequency spectrum.

Your track is a little dirtier than the original, I like it and keep up the good work! watch out on too many wubs, sometimes less is more, but that is just my personal taste.

take care!

Intro doesnt really want me to keep listening because of that melody's rhythm.  I see what you're going for and you need to just spend a liiiiittle more time on it to really make it really nice  also maybe add a suspenseful element to build tension to keep me interested

at 1:10 when the main melody comes in, its a very pleasant, soaring feeling.  So you have nailed it in the good vibes dept. and pretty good mixing.  everything else is solid as fudge. wait..fudge isnt solid, but you know what I wanted to say

thanks for the ear pleasing music!

Changing a track so much that i end up making several considerably different versions and never completely finish any of them

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Speaking from personal experience of having zero musical background, I have done countless hours of trial and error with pluck chords and which notes sound good together and which dont.  Which black keys work with the white ones and which dont, or which chord progression will sound good next.  I imagine I would have saved myself a LOT of time if I had even a little bit of knowledge about music theory.

You should focus on the arrangement because its only a minute long. That way you can arrange it to be 4 or 5 minutes long and then go from there because it starts off with a long melody and you're giving too much away too early and you can tease the listener early in the track and then release the whole melody later. Good job though!

Are you making a new thread everytime you update this? Im not attacking you but its just not good netiquette. Anyways yea you should definitely erase any low frequencies that arent necessary so its not all muddy sounding.  Your sounds are drowning eachother out.

Nice idea though