I think you can make that piano melody better that comes in at 2:35, especially the way it comes in. It could be better.

I had to be nit picky because this track is great! Ill have to listen to the original so I can see how it compares. GOod luck in the comp!

damnnn. I could learn a lot from you.  Sick beats. 

the big lead takes up a lot of space on the frequency spectrum and its drowning everything else out including the kick.  It also might be too loud so lowering the volume might solve most of the problems.  but, if you cut some of the harsh sounds, and also cut in places where the kick drum hits so the kick has more room to kick, then it will sound more punchy.  Cool intro =) nice job overall keep working

thank you! I will try that!

great track dude!

Hey everyone!  Hope all is well.

I need help.  Im really excited about this track and I am really determined to finish it, but lately its been hard and discouraging for me to finish it because I've been listening to it over and over and its losing its impact on me, and its starting to get stale. I may have to resist listening to it for a couple days to get a fresh perspective, and thats what im looking for from you guys. 

So anything that you feel like would positively contribute to me finishing this track would be much appreciated! I welcome all feedback except the douchey kind 


UPDATED 3/7/16:

So I've been squeezing in time to work on this track these past few weeks and im experimenting with a new guitar I added as well as several other changes.  This school semester in combination with a girlfriend makes it pretty hard to finish this BUT I MUST! With the help of everyone hopefully!

soundcloud really ruins the quality of your sounds sometimes. oh well. please excuse the sloppy mixing as well!

congratulations on finishing your first track! I have had the same problem for years, and im sure we're not alone. Its one thing to make a great idea, its another to take the listener on a journey and tell a story for 4-5 minutes. good job!

im not gonna try to nit pick your track but ill give one recommendation.  The new bass that comes in at 3:24 needs to have a different rhythm so it can be more dancy or catchy. It sticks out like a sore thumb in the context of the track because it sounds kind of lazy, because I know you can do better than that based on hearing everything else you created.

great job again and take care 

Great, catchy track! I think that the track progresses way too fast in the whole 1st minute, at least.  Also you could bring the main lead in at a later point in time to increase the impact of it, and use pieces of the melody early on to tease them, not even necessarily using the same sound either. Good job again!