Here's a progressive track I've been working on for a while--I've been making tracks for a few years but this is my first public post for feedback--feel free to be brutal, it's hard for me to independently judge quality of my own work.  I like all the elements but I worry I've grown too attached to them to make good mixing judgments.  A couple of key concerns:  Overall, is the mixing OK?  I've tested on monitors, headphones, my car, and on laptop speakers to make adjustments.  To me it sounds decent and non-producer friends say they like it, but well-trained feedback would help.  Second, about the percussion, no matter what I try (on both individual and group tracks--EQ, compression, multiband, saturation, etc.) I feel like I can't get things as crisp and clear as pro tracks.  Let me know if it sounds OK or if it needs work, what I can do to improve.

Thanks so much!!