You went with the flow alright! In my opinion, it worked out! The vocal mixing right after those loud drops are my favorite parts. I'm a sucker for cool vocal mixing.
I gotta agree with Shew about that first build up, though. The rest of the things you do with vocals are very interesting and I imagine it'd lull people into a sense of security. It'd be great to see what would happen if you used those skills on the rise and then threw that drop at them
Overall, I loved it. First time hearing this song remixed!