Hi Dylan
Great job so far.
Who's the vocalist?
There are many things I would suggest your work on.
First of all you should nail the foundation of the track: the kick + bassline.
I'm not sure about the percussion elements you have - they seem a bit loud. I'm not crazy about the snaps. You should try getting a more trancy percussion. Try see if you can layer a nice percussion loop below the other elements (open hat and clap). Add more effects with crash cymbal and reverse cymbals.
Vocal and melodies are great - you should keep that.
Last part is the arrangement. Try finding a similar track you like and use it as a reference for your song structure.
Here's a vocal track I'm working on:
https://soundcloud.com/martin-leblanc-eigtved/nothing
