I think this is a very good start! it's very trance-y and you have a lot of very good ideas. Overall the mix is fine - some sounds (like the percussion that comes in at about 50 seconds, your clap during the chorus, and the snaps in the pre-outro) are a bit loud, but nothing really offensive sticks out at me.
My biggest suggestion would be to work on your transitions! Trance is all about mastering the art of tension and release, and there are moments where I'm thrown off guard instead of feeling as though I know where I'm going. Take a few trance songs you like that sound similar and bring them into your session, and directly compare them with your current track. What are they doing that you're not doing? What
aren't they doing that you
are doing? How long are the different sections of their arrangements? Most importantly, what do they do at the end of those different sections? What changes after 4 bars? What about 8 bars? After 16? 32? These sorts of macro and micro tweaks to their arrangements often make all the difference in creating an epic trance track.
Keep going! I can't wait to hear what else you write.
