Have you thought about where you were going with energy manipulation? Like, where you want the climax to be, and where you wanna start building up for a drop? This sounds like the start to something really nice, but I feel like a lot of stuff is buried behind the drums. At this point, I reccommend that you just learn as much about the technical aspects of production as possible, watching youtube tutorials and streams and stuff. Don't forget that you should always be trying to gain something meaningful while you make music!