ok so you think I should get rid of certain elements during the buildup? Do you think I should filter out the drums?
Look at what you have that's going on in the build up and go reference your favorite tracks' build up.
You just have things blasting at the same time through out the entire loop.
Just so happens at that five second mark you decided to toss in a snare roll with out really doing much to the structure of the song.
I don't know what the answer is because that's a creative decision for you to make. But to have a more impact build up, things need to be taken away, have new things brought in at moments, then hopefully it will create tension as you go back into your "drop" or "verse" or "chorus" or what ever you wanna call it.