Love the LFO modulation you do. I feel like the vocals should be a little higher tonality wise?

Damn, i def like the little lfo effect on the vocals or are you sidechaining it to a ghost kick, but drop was super nice. Good Shit

Drop was fantastic, but the vocals felt labored. If that's you singing, I would try doing a more speak less breathy take and layer it quietly over top to make it more understandable. Still, good job

Thanks for the tips! That isn't me singing, the vocals are from Mako - Smoke Filled Room.

subbass/bass could be a bit wider and stronger. try using stereo width to make it wider along with the snare. it needs some more mixing because it's not standing out too much in the mix. you should be able to find help about stereo width in the mixing/mastering sub forum. besides all of that, the idea isn't bad whatsoever. i think it has potential after it's mixed and mastered. hope this helped & goodluck!