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Would appreciate some honest criticism/advice.
« on: May 23, 2016, 08:17:42 pm »
Hey there, new here. I have dabbled in producing on and off for a couple years with no real music background and have just started up again at the start of the year. I have made two small demos/"trial" tracks, and don't know if I should bother continuing with them and start from scratch again, of if I could make something good out of them, in particular I would like help with the post drop section on the Dance demo. I Would appreciate if you could take a few minute out of your day to listen. Thanks.

https://soundcloud.com/jaykob-1/dance-demo

https://soundcloud.com/jaykob-1/tropical-demo

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Re: Would appreciate some honest criticism/advice.
« Reply #1 on: May 24, 2016, 04:51:51 pm »
Hey man, cool that you're getting back into producing!

I'll start with the dance demo. I think the melodic elements are really well done and the FX/samples are well placed. They sound pretty professional too, aside from mixing and mastering. I think using EQ and adjusting levels in your track would take it to the next level.
I'm also not the biggest fan of the drop. It's vibe is very different from the first part of the track, and the I think the synth might not be suited for a melody with so much happening - I think it would work better in a more minimalistic melody. I think your white noise section is far too long as well - it starts at 1:33 and lasts for 30 seconds. That's 30 seconds where the track isn't evolving or changing, which gets a little dry after a while.

I really loved the beginning section though, and think with some mixing and mastering it could be really great! :)

Alright, now for the tropical demo. This style is more up my alley so I'll hopefully be able to give better feedback for this one.
I really like your bird samples at the beginning. They're very calming and soothing, and provide the perfect intro. Your percussion that comes in at 0:13 is REALLY well done too, they fit perfectly! The only problem is, I can barely hear them. Their levels are turned way down, and when the piano comes in at 0:23, they are drowned out immediately. All I would do to those are raise the volume up, and cut out any low end if you haven't already.

The piano I like, however it's a very simple chord progression without much happening to it, and little to no variation. I think with some more intricacies, it could be an interesting melody that changes from bar to bar.
I also think the piano is underprocessed. There doesn't seem to be very much reverb, delay, or filter work on the piano, which makes it sound very plain and uninteresting. Simply placing some low pass filter and reverb on that piano I think would make it shine more than it does.

The shake samples in the section at 0:59 sound really nice, and the percussion throughout this WIP is great! I would like to hear another melody or lead over the top of the track, but I understand that it's just a WIP and you probably haven't gotten to that stage quite yet. I think this is a really great start though, I love the vibe and feel to this one!
I also love the artwork by the way haha. Where did you find the picture by chance?

But yeah man, pretty awesome work on these 2, especially for not producing for a while! I would keep at this man, well done. :)

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Re: Would appreciate some honest criticism/advice.
« Reply #2 on: May 25, 2016, 03:47:03 am »
Hey!

So off your Dance Demo I definitely liked the melody and the sound. The FX are well placed as far as I can tell and the intro sounds good. The first stutter/glitch type of buildup sounds good, but I feel like it's a bit too long, it could be cleaned up a little and shortened and I think that it would sound better if you could stop it at 1:06ish, and then the drop. As for the drop it feels like it's a different song altogether haha. I wasn't expecting that bigroom type of drop. I liked the drop but the combination sounded weird altogether. The swoosh was too long after the drop, needs a little variation to spice it up.

 I'm still a new producer (5 months in) so take all of this with a grain of salt haha, good luck man keep going.

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Re: Would appreciate some honest criticism/advice.
« Reply #3 on: May 25, 2016, 04:29:05 am »
For your dance demo, I think it's really lacking punch with the kick/lowend area. the kick is a little too 808/lofty for this kind of track; I would reccomend looking for something with more of a click and shorter release so it hits harder. additionally sidechain compression would do wonders. depending on what daw you use find a way to chain the kick instances to the leads/pads etc so that when the kick hits the rest of the audio ducks down and gives it some space. if you tune it right it wont even feel like you touched the mids at all!