I like the rising pad that starts i think around 0:50. Adds some nice atmosphere to the track. The start of the break is also really cool too. I'd add some percussion to add some groove and movement to the track. Maybe also add some delay to the plucks to make it sound less "2D". Hope you finish this!

Thanks for the great feedback!

ApolloNash, I definitely will need to add some more percussion to the song, perhaps something minimal and noisy though as that's not the main focus here. As for the plucks I already applied what you said! Thanks man, I want to make this into a vocal track so before I fill the rest of the intro groove space with fx and risers I would very much like to get a vocalist in there first

Peteryunsie, thank you.
For your first comment I thought that my sounds and  basses ect were quiet if anything, you think otherwise? I wanted to be very modest with the electro basses, to leave lots of vocal room.
Additionally, what did you mean by add another sound here?
As the for the third comment on volume needing to increase and it being a bit drawn out, that's a bit problem with maintaining interest with 16 bar progressions while not changing too many supplementary things at once, perhaps I will post a thread under music theory, or production? 

All the best guys!