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Mosaic - The Jungle Book
« on: April 18, 2016, 05:15:44 am »

Mosaic is my duo with another dude, let me know what y'all think.
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Re: Mosaic - The Jungle Book
« Reply #1 on: May 16, 2016, 11:07:08 am »
Oh, a song about the Jungle Book. Let me listen.

Cons:

- The intro sounds more like The Beach Book than The Jungle Book, however it's likely just because of the steel drums.
- 2:13. The steel drums do not blend with the deep house pluck melodically. AT ALL. Unless it's just my ears.
- The bass that fades in shortly after is too loud. Turn it down.
- The ending should have enforced The Jungle Book title more.

Pros:

- I like that prolonged buildup midway through the song.
- Intro was good despite not sounding very jungly.

Lastly: I'm not a very experienced musician, so if anyone else gives you feedback on this song that contradicts what I've said here, it's very likely that they're right and I'm not.

-Annie

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Re: Mosaic - The Jungle Book
« Reply #2 on: May 16, 2016, 03:33:05 pm »
It's pretty cool, the steel drums make me think of beach in the caraibes though not the jungle. Have you considered pitching them down ? I'd also suggest maybe adding a little release on the sine in your second chorus. The silence between some notes doesn't quite make sense to me. That's just my opinion though, its pretty cool as it is. Also I'm listening to this on shitty earplugs in class so I might have missed a few things.