You should consider to cut the length down rather than repeat stuff that doesn't really go any where.
Also, considering the content of the song, i'd cut to the chase and get right to the drop rather than prolong the song.
Make use of eliminating drums earing in the break or throwing a band pass on them and adding in more ambient sort of sounds during the breaks/build ups.
You need more pads in this tune bro.
More transition effects, and i don't mean crazy bro stuff but you can do this tastefully.
pretty bare bones track, but with the suggestions and arrangements i think you can make it pop.
