Hey, you have a great song in the works there. Some things jumped out at me though.
Cons:- The intro is alright...up until 0:05 when this loud lead starts to play. It actually startled me a little. It's too loud compared to the rest of the sounds of the intro. Also, maybe try taking out just a little bit of noise in the highs and see if it sounds better.
- So, this loud synth plays periodically, and then the drop just...starts playing. At least, I think it's a drop, so I'll just call it that for now. I didn't notice any transition between it and the intro.
- The first drop is a little disorganized. Not that the sounds were clashing with each other, but there was a bit too much going on in the drop. The second drop was better.
- Are there any transitions in this song? Something around 0:59 sounded like a buildup, leading to what I think is the second drop (1:05).
- The idea of musical structure isn't really present in your song. Unless that was your intention. See, your song just starts...it launches into the drop shortly after, there some kind of build leading to more dropping, and the song just...finishes. There's no dynamic range. There's no distinguishing between parts.
Pros:- You've got the sound design and a vague idea going on here.
- The drops have a lot of potential.
- The vocal chops are good.
Also, when posting WIPs, try to keep them on one of these song uploading sites:
https://instaud.io/,
https://clyp.it/, or
http://picosong.com/. It keeps your SoundCloud page from getting cluttered, and since you don't have a Pro account, it saves you upload time in the future.
Overall, you've got a good idea going on. I recommend getting a second opinion (try for maybe even, three) from someone who is more experienced than me. It's very likely that if they say something that contradicts what I've said here, it's very likely that they're right and I'm not.
Good luck finishing it! And make sure you get at least two more opinions on your song. I don't want to ruin your song because I said something here that wasn't clear.
-Annie
