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Vera - Pure | Opinions wanted :)
« on: March 22, 2016, 08:43:52 pm »
Made a new track the other day and I'd love some feedback,

I played a couple solos over it, the melody is mainly piano with a drum and bass. Written in major so slightly more happy sounding.
Enjoy and please let me know what you think (be as harsh as you like).


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Re: Vera - Pure | Opinions wanted :)
« Reply #1 on: March 24, 2016, 11:22:58 pm »
The beginning percussion was really cool, it was sudden and started the track off with a bang.

The mixing/mastering work on the percussion isn't super, and I would have chosen different samples for both the hats and snares. They're both very under-processed and don't sound as good as they could be.

The piano underneath is a bit too basic sounding as well in my opinion, though the piano solos themselves are very nice. I think some reverb and mixing work could have worked wonders. I would throw some more in the high-end, and cut the low end out almost completely. A small amount of high-pass filter work would fix this pretty quickly.

I like the feel of the track though, I think your arrangement skills are very good. I would definitely work on sample choices though and some more investment in mixing/mastering/EQ work.

By the way, loooooooove the jazz-influenced minor notes at 3:22. Beeeautiful! :)

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Re: Vera - Pure | Opinions wanted :)
« Reply #2 on: March 25, 2016, 09:36:51 pm »
The beginning was gorgeous, I'd capitalize on that, however, I'm also a huge fan of the piano melodies near the end. They're fresh and innovative. Kinda keep you guessing a little. The chords below them however, are a little boomy, and somewhat drawn out, so maybe cut them down a little, and reduce some of the detunation. Good listen :)

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« Last Edit: March 26, 2016, 05:42:26 am by NewPatrol »

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Re: Vera - Pure | Opinions wanted :)
« Reply #3 on: March 26, 2016, 07:10:35 am »
Thanks for the opinions guys :D

@Shikimo I still have a lot to learn in the mixing department so I think that's sort of where I'm headed next. I'll spend the next few days trying to master that (haha).
I think I also need to just get a crazy load of sample packs to give me a bit more to choose from to fix the bad sample problem.. I also liked the 3:22 bit, I felt cool playing it ;).

@NewPatrol Thanks for the compliments, I agree about the boomy chords.. Turned them down a little. Also I realized that you're right about the first bit in that I didn't return to the first theme before the end of the song which was maybe a bit silly of me..


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Re: Vera - Pure | Opinions wanted :)
« Reply #4 on: March 26, 2016, 04:34:03 pm »
I agree with what has been said.

I think you may need to add some character to your sounds overall.

Your mixing isn't that bad, it's just not cohesive with the sound i am hearing and what the music is about.

I'd also would of chosen different samples, it doesn't fit the character of the music. I'd suggest more acoustic sounds rather than 'RAW EDM BANGER" samples.
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