Nice first attempt!

There seems to be some noise in the background during the intro. I'm not sure whether it's coming from the vocals or from the guitars. Have you tried using a noise gate to remove it from the mix? I personally like to use the Waves NS1 to remove noise like this. If the vocals are compressed then those bring out the noise even more.

The guitars in the intro sound like they contain just a tad bit too much low end/not enough brightness. Have you tried low cutting them? Maybe that or subtracting from some of the 200hz range? I feel like that would let the mids shine through some more. Especially since guitar's are primarily mid range instruments.

At 0:34 the staccato string just sort of jumps out from the mix. Maybe try balancing it better by lowering the volume. A little bit reverb wouldn't hurt either. Sounds a bit dry. Reverb will help it blend better I feel.

The only real complaints I have about the vocals is that I can't really understand the words. It's hard for me to be able to say whether it's the recording or the mix. 1:10 specifically.

The snare at 0:43 also seems to be a bit dry to my ears. Same as with the strings. A little reverb I think would help it blend. I also can't really hear the kick at the same section. I can tell it's in there buried beneath everything but either it doesn't contain much high end (It's missing the tick) or the volume is too low.


Overall good job! Definitely better than my first mixing attempts. Since you asked specifically for opinions on the mix I won't get too specific about the song. I don't hear anything that's out of key or odd so I'm assuming you either understand your music theory or have a very good ear. Great!

I did feel like the arrangement could use a bit more variations. Some parts seem to drag but hey don't just take my word for it. People have their tastes.