https://soundcloud.com/rossrossrossross/11a/s-E6k6O

It's the first song I've made that's given myself goosebumps so I'm naturally excited about it but i'm not sure if that's just like my own bias haha

Thanks a lot, I thought the drop was the weakest part to be honest. I've pretty much managed to make the rest sound what I want it too in my head but that didn't work for the chorus so in the end I just put a beat and a sub under it haha

Thanks for the advice

when that flute sound comes in at about :13, I already lose interest.  Catching the listener's interest early on is really important.  You might have nice ideas later on, but it doesnt matter since the listener will lose interest so fast.  I was patient enough to keep listening only because of the fact that we are in this forum and this is a WIP and we are all helping eachother. 

You did a good job with the melodies, sound selection, and the arrangement is ok.  Nothing really wrong there.  There is just stuff missing like things to fill the empty spaces that provide atmosphere and depth (for example more reverb and fx for certain things, that others have already stated).  Tension building is also missing.

Anyways like i said, you have no problem coming up with ideas but I just lose interest really fast because there is nothing to hook me. good job and keep working!