pretty good start you've got here. A few things I noticed:

I can definitely hear a decent amount clipping earlier on in the song. I would also layer your snare because it gets completely lost in the mix. Overall the mix feels a bit squished. I think that high passing more of your elements could help a lot because theres quite a bit of muddy tones floating around.

Really good stuff otherwise. Keep it up!

i think for this style you have to work on the relationship between the kick and bass more. they should balance each other more. sounds like the kick tail goes too far and overlaps with the bass too much. other than that, cool melody! keep workin at it