Ok, I'm sorry if I'm too crticizing here, but it needs a lot of work.

Problem with all the drop-oriented styles is that new people concentrate too much on the drop as it is the "exciting part", entirely overlooking the fact that the drop is only as strong as the piece of music it leads you out of.
...and to construct that piece of music, you need to start with the basics. Notes, intervals, chords, scales, progressions, arrangement, pleasant sound design etc...