It sounds like you're getting the right idea of the trance sound.. But like previous commenter said, it lacks structure and something to make it interesting. Something I've been trying lately that might help you, is to take a favorite song whose structure you want to emulate (same bpm if possible), drop it into a track in your project, and label all the little sections. Y'know, like at bar 8, snare comes in.. bar 16, open hi hats.. bar 20, supersaw stabs...... etc. etc. write out all the details on the markers. Then copy your elements into their tracks in the same places. You don't have to stick to it exactly, but it's a good start.
nice work though, it does sound decent.
