Don't think this is ready to share yet but I'm excited for this forum!

http://soundcloud.com/munroisland/sometimes-it-creeps-up-on-me/s-dF3gC

I'd love some feedback. This is my first song but don't hold back, be critical I want to learn.

i really love this slightly retro feeling you've got going on, so i might suggest a teeny tiny little touch of static on top??

i'm not entirely sure how i feel about the way you introduce that saw lead - the suddenness of it clashes slightly with the really smooth keys underneath. maybe stick a filter on it, or start it out drenched in reverb that gradually goes away?

this needs a super lush female vocal, in my opinion.

totally freakin agree with this.

just out of curiosity, did you record those vocals yourself or did you grab them from somewhere?

I can totally hear some vocals being used in the buildup, I think that's something you should look into. This is super creative, really excited to see where you take it!

this needs a super lush female vocal, in my opinion. the whole track sounds kind of old, in a good way. if you had an outstanding vocalist front and center with the right amount of reverb, it could be really cool. i also think when your drums come in, the filters on your synths could open up more.

there's my two cents

Thanks thats a good thought, when you mentioned lush vocals i immediately thought of mat zo's Only for You which is, coincidentally the relative major of this key

i really love this slightly retro feeling you've got going on, so i might suggest a teeny tiny little touch of static on top??

i'm not entirely sure how i feel about the way you introduce that saw lead - the suddenness of it clashes slightly with the really smooth keys underneath. maybe stick a filter on it, or start it out drenched in reverb that gradually goes away?

just out of curiosity, did you record those vocals yourself or did you grab them from somewhere?

Haha there I actually do have some static on top but that channel was muted when I bounced it. The lead I want to really pop out when you first hear it so I'm not sure about the reverb but I do want it more mellow/sad sounding. Do you have any suggestions for that?

Yes I recorded both the guitar and vocals myself

I feel like the chords need to have a lowpass on them, and then slowly allow more high end through.

Good thought I'll add that in.