This is really good for your first track.

The first part of you remix doen't have many issues. I do not know how much you did by your self there, but if you sampled it on your own, then you did a good job.


Your drop seems to have more issues.

You should work on your volume level: the bass is too loud and the drums too quiet. Also you should work with compression and sidechain the your bass to the kick.

This should do a good mprovement in quality.  But for your first track it's fine, just continue producing and your get    automatically better.

I really like this, I want more! Try controlling your volumes and sidechain the bass to the kick like @arigato said! I like it good job!

Thank you all for the awesome feedback!

 
I will be changing the kick after the drop to a harder/punchier one, and sidechain the bass to it.
I got carried away with the bass volume; it happens when you struggle for months and are finally able to make something you like.