DUDE this is honestly so interesting. its already pretty close but i feel like some more lofi effects on the intro chords would add a lot, sort of like what Tame Impala does on a lot of their synths on Lonerism, if you know/ like them. i think continuing the song and going into a more steady beat, and bringing in a guitar (maybe an acoustic one could be cool?) could be really interesting, but the sounds you've got going on already sound v v unique. i like it a lot!!

ahhhhh i freaking LOVE tame impala, kevin is so clever with his sounds vroeuhvohe
thanks for the feedback!

man this is super interesting! very unique. i think it could be more powerful with the right chord progression in my opinion. production and instrumentation sound great. but that heavy section could be super powerful with those sounds and the right notes. also, might want to try adding a melody that's very prominent. seems lacking in the melodic area.

just my opinion. love it though! great job 

is there anything you can suggest about the 'right' progression? thanks for leaving a reply!

oh wow this is really nice!

i personally don't care so much if the progression is a bit common - most people don't notice other than really elitist producers, and they don't really matter do they?

i find the structure mostly fine, although i agree with anhydrite that it might be cool if the percussion is briefly taken away when the piano is introduced. maybeee the build up portion is a little long, although i very much like it the way it is.

to make the intro just a little bit more interesting, i think a little synth glissando with delay every 8 bars or so could be nice - or maybe a clap with some reverb. something that's not too complicated!