I like the idea of this track,

The melody is pretty catchy, the synths sound a little too cheesy in the intro, percussion is too simple, it needs more FX for sure.
For the drop, don't be afraid to go ham, saw bass can be harder, add another layer and maybe turn it up a tad and a bit more reverb. The white noise chopped up thing is cool, but I don't feel like it fits in 100%, kind of comes out of no where, maybe more FX will help with that, and not all the notes fit in 100%, I would say it's almost there.

lots of good ideas, keep it up.

2:10, synths that come in are a little cheesy (the arp), add another synth layer and glue the arp with the lead on a bus or something.

The build at 2:30 has some weird volume issues and stereo issues.

The drop at 2:40, the kick doesn't hit hard enough, doesn't feel like a drop, you can see it in the waveform a bit. The lead sounds a little cheesy, and the bass isn't come through. Maybe turn the lead down and separate the stereo a tad, turn up the kick and the bass, the lead doesn't sound to be sidechained to the bass either.

The detail is pretty decent, and you have the right idea during the drop to keep it not stale. Idea's are there, just follow through will some more execution and you've got a good track on the way.

Sounds like hardwell kind of, the synths at :30 sound kind of cheesy with the way the melody is. There's too much clutter going on too. The drop at 1:00 is pretty good for a big room track, but it's a little muddy, could be cleaned up a bit. 1:30 is a really good switch up, still think the lead can be a little less cheesy though.

Not bad, good ideas.

The synth that comes in at 2:00 doesn't do enough, it's too simple or it doesn't fit.
Maybe it needs something else with it or some reverb or a new synth all together.

I do kind of like it at 2:35 at first but it gets faded away, and it's this future house kind of synth. If you want it to be techno, it needs less of a bouncy rhythm and a just something different i guess.

The sound effects and percussion are fantastic though.

Complete shit m8, please google "Ozone tips for beginners"

WHY CANT YOU MAKE A BETTER VERSION OF BIPOLAR!?!? ZOMG












Just kidding, This style is incredible. I'm blown away by the stereo placement. Everything is so clean, what kind of phaser did you use?

Not bad for a first track.
Blunt Criticism: Track gets stale, there's some variation, which is good (variation in tracks are VERY important), but the bassline stays the exact same, needs to change and it needs more layers. I forgot who said it but it applies "You can't polish a turd." In other words, a lot of your sounds in your track sound stock or just not interesting enough.


A couple of tips:
1.) Figure out what genre you're producing, go to beatport top 10 in that genre, see what differs between your track and their track. Doesn't mean that you HAVE to conform to their creative process, but listen to what they do in their tracks, and see what elements your track is missing.
2.) Good, you're a DJ. Think to yourself: "Would I play this song out?"
If not, what reasons would you play it out? Intro outro sucks? Not catchy enough? Doesn't sound professional?
3.) Join a community of other producers in that genre, so you can learn and evolve.

PSA: One last thing, I'll put this out there, since everybody does this and I noticed you do this too...
DO NOT EVER REPOST PEOPLES STUFF ON SOUNDCLOUD.
Why? Because when people are coming to your profile, they want to see what YOU made. They don't want to dig through reposts of skrillex tracks and Cheif Keef tracks just to find your 2 songs BURIED in 50 reposts.
The only exception is if you are on a label thats tight knit and you are promoting a label mate's track.

The melody is good, the synths are fun, really dig the chiptune style, I just feel like the track doesn't really have a clear direction. Would make a great soundtrack for pokemon!