woke up a morning and made this

[NotRealMe]

hi guys its me again, i woke up one morning and got tired of making bass patches and just wanted to have fun with ableton and i made this.
its really just an intro idea but i thought i'd share it to get some feedbacks, criticism.  love u

EDIT : i've upload a newer/better version and would love to get feedbacks, and criticism again lol https://soundcloud.com/user-668608673/stuck-in-my-head/s-BrP6P

[mnw]

I'm a fan this, it's pretty dope! Not too much constructive criticism comes to mind. When the clap comes in around 0:29 it could be louder. The sweeping white noise FX also is a bit overwhelming, I'm hesitant to say that it's too loud but maybe widening it so it doesn't take up so much of the middle of the stereo field would help it fit better. I'm not a big fan of the oscillating synth that comes in at around 0:44, it's a bit harsh and screechy which doesn't fit the mood that well imo. Overall cool stuff, hope this helps!

[NotRealMe]

first of all thanks for checking it out ! you're actually one of the first person to ever criticise my work and i'm so fucking happy you did ! You're right, the claps could be louder i wasn't sure of it. the oscillating synth is a patch i made in serum and i felt like it was sounding funny but ya maybe i should try another synth, a less piercing one. What about the drums? i'm undecided about the tone of the snare i chose lol
thx for all the tips and criticism !

[FarleyCZ]

The snare might sound better downtuned a semitone or two, you're right. I'd also watch out for low mids on the stab synth. It's mostly in the beckground, so it doesn't need much of them. Right now it clashes with the minismalistic bass just a tiny bit. Reverb might be cool for the arpegiated delayed synth. But I'm really a lot into the delay-reverb combination, so that just might not be your thing. Overall good direction so far!